Friday, October 23, 2009
Persuasive Speeches
Well, the persuasive issues speeches are underway! Please post your critiques here. Be sure that all critiques are detailed and make comment to how well the presenters applied their argument to Monroe's Motivated Sequence, in addition to including the supporting sources needed to provide the necessary reasoning and evidence. Remember, arguments need logic and evidence every step of the way to be peruasive. Holes in the argument ( lack of evidence) need to be addressed in this critique.
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I presented my persuasive speech last Tuesday about smoking tobacco products on college campuses and why it needs to be banned. I opened my presentation with a youtube clip regarding the hazards of smoking to grab the audience's attention and immediately establish what my topic would be in regards to. I continued on by establishing the need for this by presenting health dangers, pollution needs and overall betterment of the campuses. By providing actual examples and statistics from credible sources such as literary journals, scholars, doctors and accredited internet websites, I was able to prove how this problem can actually affect the work of college students and be detrimental to them whether they are smokers or no. My action was to use organizational groups, demonstrations, announcements, etc to convey this message to an entire university and hopefully attract more people to support the cause. Overall, my presentation satisfied a majority of Monroe's Motivated Sequence; however my presentation did not precisely follow the format and placed the visualization after the action. Also, it lacked a more solid understanding of what proper actions to take at my personal university level as well as examples of where these actions have proven to be successful already. The presentation I felt had adequate sources, examples and evidence to support a majority of my argument however. It also makes me rethink what actions an individual could actually take to make a significant difference .
I think I brought the highest amount of charisma to this speech out of all of my speeches. I admit I had experience giving this speech because I had to present it in different forms on more than one occasion for the Seneca Environmental Club, but I had a real good feeling about this one. I thought that I brought my audience’s attention to an important concept, while persuading them to do something that I believe in. I was happy to see that a number of my classmates began to recycle properly immediately after my speech. Overall, I thought I delivered a powerful speech, but apparently I left out or did not properly complete numerous objectives.
One of my biggest set-backs in this speech is the lack of formal citation I included in my speech. Instead of citing where I got my information from, I talked about where those organizations got their information from. Usually I feel as though the oral citation of sources within a speech adds to my credibility, but I felt as though I should take more of an expert position on the manner in this one. I also felt that by citing my sources it would take away from my rolling charisma because I have to pause, say where I got the information, and then proceed. Although you told us that you did not really care about the speaking style of this speech, I still focused on the speaking form in this speech. In my opinion nothing is more convincing than charisma when persuading someone. If someone gave me the greatest logical thought, I would think twice about it if they did not seem confident in their claim. I should have followed your instruction, and focused more on the structure of my argument. Of course, these assumptions were not completely correct, and I lost points for it. I will be sure to reincorporate correct oral citation in future speeches, and think more structurally when using persuasion.
Another big setback in this speech was flaws found within my argument. Apparently, I did not make the benefits of my speech bluntly obvious by literally stating them. I was under the impression that the benefits were automatically implied in my argument because I set up situations that showed the consequences of the audience not with my argument. I was under the impression that the benefits of my argument made up a fair portion of my reasoning, but I was once again wrong to make assumptions. I should have literally stated the benefits by numbering them or bulleting them. In future persuasive speeches I will be sure to incorporate a summary of all things I say and a preview of what I have to say before I say it.
Although I missed more than the usual objectives, in my opinion this was the best speech I delivered. I literally saw more smiles than my entertainment speech. I didn’t see more laughter smiles, but I definitely saw more smiles that were the result of people hearing someone speak the truth and connecting with them. I was very happy with the amount of energy that I brought to that speech, and I think my audience appreciated the effort. I hope to keep that energy and charisma level in future speeches.
I presented my persuasive speech on November 3rd on the reasons why I believe the terms “whore,” “slut,” or any other term to negatively describe an assumed level of a woman’s promiscuity should be eliminated. After I presented my presentation, everyone was impressed with my overall passion towards my topic and had little to say about my delivery and evidence. Though everyone believes that I did extremely well, I feel I could have done a lot better. First and foremost, due to the content and extent of my topic, it was very difficult for me to speak while attempting to hold back the various and multiple emotions I was feeling all at once. In order for my speech to be effective, though, I had to dive deep into my mind to retrieve the memories and my heart the emotions to provide the quintessential evidence needed to support my argument. Though it took a lot from and out of me to do this, it had to be done. Also, there was an issue that I was having with my note cards because of my emotional state. As I continued to give me speech and become more emotionally involved, I kept losing place with my index cards and continuously flipped through them missing the content of which I was looking for. There was a moment I had to take a pause to compose myself in order to finish my presentation and this problem then lead to my next problem. Because I could not keep my place with my note cards, I had to constantly look at the PowerPoint more often than I would have liked to remember the content of the slides and the citations. It would have been much easier for me to get them off the cards but because I kept losing my place that was nearly impossible to accomplish. Last but not least, I felt like I could have improved the tone of my voice to engage the audience more. At points during my speech, I noticed I was losing some of my audience members and am not sure if it had to do with them losing focus because they were thinking about some of the things I was saying or interest because of how I was saying them. Overall, though, I satisfied all of the steps of Monroe’s Motivated Sequence, attention, need, satisfaction, visualization, and action, which were necessary for the proper execution of my argument and made sure to provide each step with sufficient evidence to make my further my point. Hopefully, my argument was very convincing to my audience, and the next time that I present a persuasive speech that I am able to keep my composure and audience’s attention at all times. Note: I just wanted to say thank you to everyone, including Professor McManimon, for supporting me during and after my presentation. Thank you all.
On Thursday, November 5, 2009, I was able to present my persuasive speech to the class. I decided to go up first this time around because I was last in the last speech. My topic was called Mac vs. PC and why you should own a Macintosh. My objective was to persuade the audience into getting a Macintosh instead of a P.C. I choose this topic because I felt familiar with it and it is something people should know about. In pervious speeches, I felt like I had the confident and strive to give a powerful speech. In this situation, I did not. I have to admit that I enter the classroom door with multiple feels of nervous. I started my speech by showing a commercial on Mac vs. PC. It was humorous and it brought enlightenment to the whole ordeal. I felt that since I wasn’t as confident as usual, I would try to soften my nerves by bring a bit of my personality out in the introduction of the speech. In the introduction I gave credibility to the audience by stating my background. I worked in the Apple Store for a year and gain a lot of knowledge on Apple. My transition into my body was pretty clear. I stated my first problem and the benefits. The power point I had connected word for word with my body. I brought credibility and visual ads into my speech but overall I felt like I didn’t have enough credibility. Later, I stated my second problem and stated the benefits. Although I felt like I was doing a good job, at the end it was not good enough. I didn’t write the actions that needed to be taken. I ended my speech by leaving the audience with an unforgettable ending, “Once you go Mac…you never go back.” Towards the end of the speech I felt confident and I felt like the audience really grasped the information. At the end it turns out that I didn’t reach the requirements that I needed to reach. I was a bit disappointed with what I was told because I felt like I gave a good speech. At the end of the day I hoped the audience enjoy my speech and think twice before purchasing a computer. I will do better in the next assignment.
I presented my speech on Friday November 6th about why men or boys should not sag their pants. Right away I opened up my speech by asking the audience to imagine themselves in a scenario where they were a CEO interviewing people for job positions in a new company. This allowed the audience to connect and visualize more when I began slowly introducing my topic. In my introduction I used my PowerPoint presentation as a visual aid to help establish credibility. Once I had grabbed the audience’s attention brought in the need for change by using credible resources combined with my thesis ideas. One idea I think that I did a particularly good job of presenting to the audience was that “many people are unaware of the true origin of sagging pants.” I say this because when I introduced my first source and made the connection between sagging pants and slavery I got many surprised reactions from the members of the audience. Their reactions let me know that I was bringing in new information that they were unaware of which helped me establish credibility.
Another point where I did a good job establishing credibility was while supporting my second point “that men are prejudged and miss out on important opportunities when they sag their pants.” One of the methods I used to support this claim was a personal account in which I was witness to someone who was being wrongly stereotyped because of their appearance. The story that I shared showed that I knew what I was talking about and it was a key connecting point in my speech. While my credibility was legitimate and it helped push my speech it was brought to my attention that there were certain areas upon which I could have improved.
Specifically I could have defined my second benefit a little more clearly. My second benefit was that “a man who looks and feels good will be more confident and exposed to more opportunities.” This was very closely related to one of my visualizations and it could have been defined in a way that made it seem like more of a benefit than a result. Also I could have taken a little more time on my introduction so that I could incorporate a few more sources which would have boosted the amount of credibility that I already had. Overall I feel as though this speech went very well and that I used Monroe’s Motivated Sequence properly in order to deliver my speech effectively. One additional point that helped push my speech over the top was the connection that I made to the action that the class could take with facebook.com. Facebook.com is a very popular website among my peer group, so this allowed them to connect to my speech on a different level which was very convenient for them. Even though there was room for improvement I am very satisfied with my delivery of this speech.
Tiffany Ervin (2:20 class)
I presented my persuasive speech the first day last Tuesday about fitness for young teens in the United States and why it should be a must teen’s stay fit during their younger years. I opened up my speech introducing the topic and my name and the purpose for me choosing the topic. My attention getter was asking the audience the question who ever had a fear of getting over weight. After that I presented the problem that the nation was being overwhelmed by obesity I put a map of the statistics on the power point to show how much it was in each state and the areas where it was most common. After I showed the map I showed how easy it was to go towards obesity by showing the common foods we eat everyday then moved into that by stating sources.
The Information I had was good but I did not present the rest of my speech due to nervousness. But while I was up their I tried to stay calm and remember the speech techniques I was taught I tried to have confident and I started out strong but as I was going along I started running out of words fast and I just got overwhelmed. As far as my outline I tried to follow the format as much as possible and provide an argument for every topic.
I presented my speech last week on why New Jersey is the best state to live in. I believe that I had very good points to bring about my argument but I could have practiced the delivery a little more. I am becoming more and more comfortable in front on the class every-time I get up to do a speech. I believe that I followed Monroe’s Motivated Sequence very well, aside from the fact that I did not use transitions when going from point to point. I related to the class very well since we are all from New Jersey and I used examples in which I knew everyone could somehow relate to. I brought in credibility in the introduction from a very valid source, someone who has lived in New Jersey her whole life. Statistics were a very important part of my speech because it proved even more why it is great to live here. I ended with a quote from Bruce Springstien, who is also from New Jersey, about how there is nothing better than being in love with a Jersey girl. I think I could have done something more creative with my action step, as it could have been much more exciting then I made it. I made sure that I backed up whatever I said on every single slide with a quote or a statistic in order to make my information credible.
I did my persuasive speech on the fact that Rider should clean up its lake. I feel that I had some great points in my speech and the power point corresponded to what I was saying at the time however at certain point especially near the quotes I felt that I relied to greatly on the PowerPoint. Yet, I was very proud of myself for staying off the note cards. I miss my credibility in the intro to my speech however I brought in many sources of knowledge with quotes and fact throughout my speech. I finally got used to bringing in transitions between the points but I may have left out one of two in the delivery of my speech. I had many good ideas and I brought in real life situations where my idea would work such as the adopt a highway program across the country. My other idea however I didn’t develop thoroughly. My other option for the action step was not clear to the audience and I didn’t give them specific steps to follow to follow thought with the proposed plan. However, I did like the quote I ended my speech with. I did not like my conclusion, it was not fully developed and could have been stronger for a greater impact.
Last week I presented a speech on how the government and citizens of the U.S need to do something about the growing homelessness population. My attention-getter started out with a picture of a homeless man and a statistic of how many homeless people are estimated to be in the United States. My intro not only included a statistic, but it also outlined what I was going to be speaking about within my speech. For the most part I followed the construct of Monroe’s Motivated Sequence, which included naming two problems, their solutions, the use of analogies, benefits, and conclusion. But my two issues with the speech dealt with the analogies and the benefits. I only used one analogy, which was showing what 15% was compared to 15% in a pie chart. When it came to the benefits, it was supposed to be benefits for the people in the audience; what they were going to get out it. The way I used the benefits, it was more or less what the homeless people were going to benefit if such people like those in the audience helped out. When it came to my conclusion and the action, I told those in the audience who they could contact and where they could go, and gave a memorable statement. I would say that, overall, I had a good speech, and with the fixing of a better analogy for my second problem, and showing what the benefits were for those in the audience, my speech would’ve been even better.
On Tuesday November 3, 2009 I presented my persuasive speech on the importance of exercise especially in the lives of college students. In all honesty I knew this was not one of my greatest speeches and I felt as if I needed to be more prepared but I was not sure how. I was told that I was jumping around a bit and I was not successful at fulfilling all of Monroe’s techniques. It was also stated that one of my video clips did not coincide with my argument; I have to illustrate more of a realistic approach. Overall, my speech was a disaster. I need to work on being more self-confident, being more aware of what my task at hand is, and to just be calm. I that because I was not too sure of my work I made myself nervous thus why I kept jumping around when I was presenting and why I just could not get it done. In general, my speech was about how important it is to exercise both health wise and mentally. I supported my reasoning’s with video-clips and some statements by medical professionals. The major affects and influences were highlighted to make clear to my audience the true dangers of bad eating habits and lack of physical activity. All in all, even though this was and probably considered my worst speech presentation I felt that I provided some really good facts and examples. I also felt that my video clips provided more insight on what I was trying to get across to my audience. Overall, I know I could have presented much better and I should have added more detail to my outline but I felt that I was able to get a good amount of information across.
I believe that the persuasive speech was one of my most favorite to present. Researching this issue truly made me become a believer for the cause. During my speech there were some technical difficulties while Stef was manning my slides but I think I covered it up well and kept moving through my speech as planned. I had good visuals and evidence to back up what I was saying and make my points. I still need to work on my body placement while giving my speech and I also started it off with the word “OK”. My PowerPoint also had too many words on the screen which I need to watch out for next time. I also need to work on not reading off the PowerPoint as much and connecting with the audience more. Because this speech was about a serious topic I felt awkward smiling at the audience as I usually do, I need to figure out a way to connect with them on a serious level.
Convincing an audience to believe in a certain topic that you believe in is a difficult task to perform. You must have specific evidence, credibility, and visual aid to grab the attention of the audience. This is exactly what I had to do to convince my audience to agree with me on monitoring chat rooms. On Tuesday, November 3, 2009 I presented a persuasive speech on why chat rooms should be monitored. I used Monroe’s five step process to get started with my speech. I grabbed the audience attention, provided the need, described a plan, had visualization, and an action. With these five steps all in my speech I was ready to let my audience feel what I felt about chat rooms. I began my speech by pulling in the audience with imagining that a person that they knew was molested and killed, but the source of it all was in a chat room. I started off well and got their attention. Then transitioned to how chat rooms are not a place for children, with the examples of an article that states a man raping then killing a girl in a K-Mart parking lot. I described who would be effected, the importance, and benefits for this problem. Where is lacked in is evidence. I believe that I could have gotten more evidence, and another benefit to really persuade the audience into really believing what I was saying. The part that I did well was bringing in a video from Dateline’s to catch a Predator which shows how predators are caught trying to met up with minors from chat rooms. I described another subtopic on how hackers search into chat rooms which is why then should be monitored. I brought in an example from an article called “Expert: Chat rooms have for hackers” by Renay San Miguel, which talked about how there is a hacker chat room called internet rely chat room sites. This is where hackers log into so they could trade information with other hackers. Basically it is Ebay for hackers. Again I used the Monroe’s five steps to complete this subtopic and lacked in a couple of areas. First I didn’t express enough evidence for this topic. I only used one article where there could have been room to use more evidence to keep the audience convinced. Also I should have created better benefits that were more appealing to a whole crowd then just appealing to a few others and myself. Where I thought that I gained back the audience is where I explained how a hacker gets onto this internet relay site and finds your credit card information on the internet. Now this hacker has access to your information and is able give it to other hackers around the world. This is when the audience started to really look at how bad chat rooms really are because it was something that they never heard about. I concluded me speech by telling the audience about my experience on being on a chat room. How a man started talking to my cousin and I knowing that we were twelve and he was thirty years old. Then told my audience to tell all the children that you know that chat rooms are a dangerous place to be in. I lacked in giving a plan at the end of my speech but I do believe that I did well over all.
My persuasive speech was about child abuse. In my introduction I started talking about how passionate I was about children. My objective was to persuade my audience to volunteer at Prevent Child Abuse New Jersey. This topic was very interesting because not everybody is aware of this problem. I followed the steps of Monroe Motivated sequence. However, I did not expand upon the needs or the solution. In a persuasive speech you are trying to motivate people in believe in you and they will do or buy what they are asked for. I believe the argument and objectives in my speech were pretty strong, but I did not follow fully the steps in Monroe Motivated Sequence. In my solution, I encouraged my audience to take action and volunteer at an organization that gives awareness about child abuse, and gives assistance to families that are in need. It is very important if we get involved in our community and I thought that this could be a good way to start. Even though my action was not strong enough to motivate my audience to volunteer, I used other sources and I handed the applications to everyone in the class. My delivery was good, and my goal of giving good eye contact was reached. I brought in reasoning and evidence into my speech which made it successful. I supported my evidence with various statistics. I believe that the video that I had in my power point was a very powerful one and it made a huge impact in all of us. This speech really help me prepare for further speech, specially if I want to persuade people to do something.
I presented my persuasive speech on the seriousness of teen abusive relationships and it receiving more attention. In my opening I had an attention getter and I had statistics about teen physical and mental abuse. I also talked about the signs to look out for in order to determine if someone is in an abusive relationship, which I backed up with a video and personal experience. I tried to relate to my audience by talking about the domestic violence incident that occurred with Rihanna and Chris Brown. I had good eye contact and chose a topic that could relate to my audience, however I could have used more sources in order to gain more credibility. I also could have stated the solution a little more clearly in order for a course of action to occur. Lastly, I did not state how the solution could benefit my audience, therefore, making it a good informative speech but not a good persuasive speech.
On Tuesday November 3, 2009 I presented my persuasive speech on social networking sites in todays society and if they are good or for society or not. When creating my outline for the speech I misinterpreted the problem part of the technique in Monroe’s Motivated Sequence. Instead of stating the problems with Social Networking SItes I stated the problems that what would appear if these sites did not exist. Because of this, it affected the rest of Monroe’s sequence when it came to the plan, benefits and solutions. Also, when I presented the speech it made it sound as if the points I was speaking were repetitive. As a whole, it effected the way I tried to use the persuasiveness of my topic. With that being said, though, I was still able to provide my speech with research and backed up information. I used statistics to back up my points and I also used quotes from several studies. During the delivery of my speech, however, I lost some of the points I had in my outline when it came to actually speaking them out loud. That in turn, made me miss key points when it came to my powerpoint and caused me to skip over some of the slides. I thought my attention getter or opening was OK. I started by asking the audience if they used social networking sites such as Facebook, Twitter, Myspace, Linkedin, etc.--which they did. So I was able to establish a need for the audience and I also backed it up with evidence. My conclusion or “Call to Action” could have been stronger. I did not show links to where the audience can go to sign up for these networking sites or provided them with the web pages. Overall, my speech could have been presented much better than it was. If I would have understood the problems right I think it would have been better. For the future, I would need to work on that and also work on the conclusion of it. My delivery is something I too need to improve on. I know I was not making eye contact and that I was losing my audience as my speech progressed.
I presented my persuasive speech last week on animal abuse and how it ties in with domestic violence. I feel as if I followed Monroe’s motivated sequence very well. For the attention getter, I used a Youtube clip at the beginning of my speech. It was a very strong video which by the look in the audience’s eyes, were very pulled in. Shortly after I presented my problem and backed it up with provable statistics and another Youtube video. I was lacking in the planning area, in which I only showed the audience the ASPCA website. What I should have done was navigate them through the website and also hand out flyers with contact numbers on it. Another part in Monroe’s motivated sequence that I need improvement on is the benefits. I did not explain the benefits gained by helping save animals form abuse. My conclusion went very well with the closing Youtube video I presented. It really showed the true nature of animal abuse and left the audience with sorrow and the urgency to help the abused animals. The main problem I encountered with my speech was that I skipped a big chunk in the middle. I feel the problem was I did not organize my outline enough to make my points flow. As a result, I missed out on important information and statistics I could have shown the audience.
My persuasive speech was about Donating blood. I thought out of all the speeches I have done this is what I became most interested about as I researched, so I think my delivery was much more interesting. I started with a clip that pulled in my audience. I also provided many statistics, although I didn’t use many sources, I thought they were still very effective in my delivery. Also throughout my delivery it was very well organized. I also included many ways to become involved in donating blood at a convenient location on campus as well as a close location at a more “stable” location off campus and close. Also, the ways to make appointments are abundant and easy. There were many ways that the audience can be “rewarded.” One of way to become rewarded is being able to save a life, and what evil person would pass up that opportunity? Lastly I ended with a clip. Both clips opened your eyes and both were commercials from the red cross that showed the importance of donating. I think I really tuned in with the audience and if I were watching I would want to donate. Although in the beginning I tripped up in my words, as I continued I felt more comfortable.
The speech that I presented could have be polished a little bit more. For starters, I did not have a PowerPoint. I am very disappointed that I did not make one because there are many areas where a PowerPoint was definitely needed. For example, in the action, I had a web site link where other could have gone to petition to ban energy drinks. The only way that they could have really seen the way to do it, was through a link added on the PowerPoint. Another thing that I could have done better is citing my sources. There were some sources that I did not say more details, like the title, author or date. I did say these details for most of them, but I should have done it for all of them. Next time, I would like to add more sources. This will only help create creativity for my side of the argument. One thing that I did well was follow Monroe's Motivated Sequence. I had everything that was needed: attention, two needs, four visualization, and two actions. I made sure to follow a proper introduction with all its components. I specified the important of the needs and how it relates to everyone. I found two good solutions that would fix the problem entirely and showed examples of other places where these solutions have worked. I found 4 visualization or benefits that would come as an addition of fixing the problem. I also found two good way of my audience could take action and told them how to do it. Over all, there are lots of things that I could have worked one but it was a good first persuasive speech.
Last week I presented a speech on the following topic, “The SAT’s do not measure or predict the amount of success someone can gain in the future.” Unfortunately, I did not give my presentation all of my effort. I was not prepared for the simple fact that I did not have a power point. The topic in deed was very interesting and I learned a lot during my research. I found much imperative information that I wanted to share with the class. That day, I was really sick which played a huge role on the way I presented and perform my speech. I could not speak but I decided to do my speech. Even though I was sick, I think I did well. Being sick allowed me not to stutter as much and be relaxed. I did not feel pressured to talk and I felt like my speech was on point meaning I was on target on each point. I brought a lot of information in my outline and my verbal presentation as well. I believe this topic was a great speech topic to discuss in class and I wish I could present the speech one more time. I put a lot of work into my outline and practice and I’m upset that I got really sick on the day I had to present. In my speech I incorporated a lot of examples that I believe supported my speech. I gave the listeners examples so that the readers could not be perplex about my speech or topic. I even mentioned some information that allowed the readers to be shocked and surprised. Overall, my presentation was ok and I do regret that I did not put all my effort into it because I was sick. I did add creditability to my speech by supporting each reasoning with factual information.
I presented my speech the other week and my topic was on opting to adopt pets rather than buying them. I believe that I could have done a whole lot better. My class as a whole along with Professor McManimon and myself believes that I psyche myself out. I had excellent details and I believe that I gave passion to my speech. For some reason I believe I am regressing a little bit regarding my confidence in front of the classroom. I lost my good standing posture in this last speech because instead I had my legs crossed and I appeared uncomfortable. In the future I will strive to be a better onstage speaker because mentality wise I have everything together. I need to handle my nervousness better. Although my confidence needs a boost, I did feel as though my speech went well in some aspects. I had a chart of statistics, I evoked emotional appeal and I even made the audience laugh with my reasonings. I believe I had their attention which is the main goal of any speech. I cited all my sources correctly and I cited everything. I liked my actual power point and overall I feel as though I did well.
My persuasive was on why learning a foreign language whether it be a second, third, or fourth language is good and considered an asset. Trying to persuade an audience is very difficult, especially for me since I do not like speaking in front of people. I will speak in front of an audience only if I really have to and no one else will speak, but unfortunately Speech class is not like that. We have to speak regardless, whether we like it or not for a grade, because of this I have become a better speaker, I feel. With all that said, despite my improvement in the class I feel my persuasive speech was lacking in some areas. But on the contrary my speaking outline was full of information, contained Monroe’s sequence, evidence, sources, and reasoning; which made for an A presentation, but when it was time for me to present I lacked in my presentation. For one, I was not loud at all, and this was because I received some bad news earlier that day. I should have pulled my professor to the side and explained to her what was going on in class, instead of telling her nothing and just presenting, because my sad attitude leaked in my performance. For one, I disregarded most of my key points from my outline. I had overlooked steps because I was upset and I also wanted to get the speech over with because I was not having such a good day. I was also overwhelmed when I was about to present because I thought I had my speech down pack but when I stood up in front of my class I chocked. I lacked some evidence, but I retained some evidence. I definitely used reasoning in my presentation when I talked about…when I talked about America begin a security blanket/comfort zone, that is why most people feel they need not learn a foreign language. I feel some of my examples and my sources may have been overlooked due to my low, quiet, monotone delivery. I believe I had holes in my argument because I missed some key points from my outline. When I was preparing for my speech I used exact words on my note cards because I thought it was an important line and I wanted to capture everything, but this was not a good idea. Not a good idea because a speech should not be word for word from your outline, it should be a paraphrase or summary on everything, nothing exact. Because of this I lost points. I had a good solution and benefits, but my call for action was a little short and I did not bring in any hands-on evidence. I had planned to use a declare major/minor form, but I left it in my dorm room so I could not show my audience. If I did have the form it would have made the conclusion a little better. I took a fast speaking approach with this speech, and that is something that I usually do not do. I just needed to relax and talk to my professor about my situation before this speech, since I did not it all showed in my presentation. In my opinion this had to be one of the not so good presentations that I have produced in this class.
On Friday, November 20, 2009 I presented my persuasive speech. My persuasive speech was on underage drinking. My goal in the speech was to persuade others to believe that the law for drinking should be changed from twenty-one to eighteen. I feel as though I have improved since the summer on my nervousness of presenting. I am no longer extremely nervous when it comes to standing up in front to give a speech. Although I had less nerves, I feel as if I could have done a better job in presenting this speech. I need to be more confident in my voice while speaking. Also, I should have had more citations throughout my speech. I had a few good ones, like the chart with the statistics of people who are worried about underage drinking, and the quote from the Newsweek article. I had a lot of good information throughout my speech but I did not have all the citations to back it up, because I used more so my personal opinion and knowledge of the topic. Another thing I should have worked on better was the connectives. I needed to use more connectives while going from point to point. One good thing I feel I did was connect with the audience well. It was a topic that college students can really relate to because it is something they are going to go through being at college. I feel as though this was a good speech that just needed better citations and more practice before being presented.
When I presented my persuasive speech, I thought that I did very well, especially considering I had to delay my presentation due to illness. I was not prepared when it came to the power point although, I do believe I did just as well with out it. I met all the criteria asked and I think I supported my ideas and facts very well by using a quote from an interview, a website, as well as my real life experiences. No, this was not my best speech but I have to say it was my favorite because I think that I chose a very important topic and it is something that means a lot to me. I also wish that I really did persuade others to volunteer in a nursing home because it would really help the senior citizens. Overall, I think I did well supporting my ideas, speaking clearly, making it conversational, relating the topic to my life, as well as my attire.
I presented my speech Friday, November 6th. The topic for my persuasive speech was Animal Experimentation. The two problems I approached was how cruel animal experimentation and how ineffective the experiments are. The solutions to the problem were being aware of the companies and products that experiment on animals. The second solution was to join PETA or SAEN and become involved with stopping animal experimentation. My attention grabber was describing the crucial pain animals go through during these experiments. I kept their attention with two videos that really got their sympathy. I also used an analogy to bring reason to my points. I compared how ineffective animal experimentation is too how ineffective it would be if you test a birth control pill on a male. I used a lot of research and had a lot of quotes that backed up all my points. I think I could have improved in my delivery. I depended on my note cards a lot and I didn’t have a strong eye contact with the audience. I did feel comfortable preparing and delivering this speech.
When I presented my persuasive speech on the “Men Vs. Women in the Media” I realized that I did have passion for my speech but I did not present it in order. I did the outline very well in my opinion but when I got up to speech I forgot a lot of my points and I panicked . I neglected to mention the important aspects of my speech such as why women act the way they do when they see a guy. As a result, I jumped around a lot during the speech and did not stay on track. Overall my speech could have been more organized.
I presented my persuasive speech on “Stopping the Violence in Paterson”. I chose this topic because I am very passionate about my hometown and the only thing I want for my hometown is of course nothing but the best. I recently witnessed a couple of deaths this past summer and a shout out where one person got injured this past weekend. The violence is out of control in my city. I felt like I did a great job in my presentation. I used a good attention getter. In my attention getter I used a personal expierence. I used a lot of personal expierences in this speech which built my credibility and helped the audience understand more. I even used pictures I took in my hometown and incorporated them into my powerpoint. I got a bit disappointed towards the end because I started to cry and that distracted me, which made me lose my thoughts. I tried to catch myself but I couldn’t. My action plan towards the end was a bit weak because I did not include better references and forgot some of the things on my outline. Overall my speech was okay I guess next time I will try harder.
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